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첨삭 부탁드립니다. 10일만에 끝내는 토익스피킹

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I think home can’t concentrate on studying. 

When studying, students usually study at a library or cafe. 

In the case of working home, employees will be distracted their focusing. Also, a monitoring director doesn't exist.

It results in lower productivity.

For these reasons, I think “Working from the office is more effective than working from home.


전체적인 맥락은 "집은 집중이 되지 않습니다학교는 작은 사회입니다보통 공부를 할 때카페나 도서관에서 공부를 하는 학생들이 많습니다재택 근무의 경우집중이 분산될 것입니다. 또한감시하는 사람이 없어 업무 중 다른 행동을 하는 경우도 많아 생산성 역시 떨어질 것이라고 생각합니다이러한 이유로 저는 사무실에서 일하는 것이 재택 근무보다 효과적이라고 생각합니다." 입니다.


2) I agree that "children these days study more than in the past"

 First, Society has become more and more competive. It is essential to learn English, Japanese and Chinese... I saw the news that a topic “too much academic are influcences with dagerous to childeren” In the past, the place that gathered children is a playground. but these days the place is a academic. We can't see children in a playground. The playgound is unoccupied. Because they are studying in academic.

 

For these reasons, I agree that “children these days study more than in the past”


요즘 아이들은 과거보다 더 많이 공부한다는 의견에 동의합니다.

첫 번째로, 사회는 점점 더 경쟁적으로 변화되어 가고 있습니다. 영어, 일본어, 중국어 등의 제2외국어를 배우는 것은 필수입니다.

저는 "너무 많은 학원을 다니는 것은 아이들에게 위험한 영향을 끼치는가" 에 대한 주제에 대한 뉴스를 본 적이 있습니다.

과거에는 아이들이 모이는 장소가 놀이터였으나, 요즘은 학원입니다. 우리는 놀이터에서 아이들을 볼 수 없습니다. 놀이터는 사람이 없어요. 왜냐하면 그들은 학원에서 공부하고 있기 때문이죠.


이러한 이유로 저는 "요즘 아이들이 과거보다 더 공부한다"라는 의견에 동의합니다.




3) If I got a raise, I think I would most likely spend money on a trip. Trip gives us memorable experiences. I think experience in a new place makes me more growth.

 

Also, traveling with my friends makes our relationship closer! With drinking, secret mood is so perfect. The mood makes us that we talk to share our secret stories. It is so memorable experiences!

 

Additionally, the expericencing makes us to feel happy.


제 월급이 인상되면저는 여행에 가장 많은 돈을 쓸 것입니다.

여행은 잊을 수 없는 기억을 우리에게 주기 때문입니다새로운 곳에서의 경험은 나를 더욱 성장할 수 있게 만들어줍니다.

 

또한친구들과 함께하는 여행은 우리의 관계를 더욱 친밀하게 만들어줍니다술과 비빌 분위기는 완벽해요. 그 분위기는 우리가  비빌 얘기들을 할 수 있도록 만들어줘요. 그것은 정말 잊지 못할 추억이죠!



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01. Yes, I agree that "Focusing on the task rather than doing what it takes simultaneously results in higher productivity" for a few reasons. 

First, we are focused on one thing, we are higher productivity because focusing in one side, that is, we are less stressed. 

When diverse tasks give us, we can distract. That results in lower productivity.

Also, I guess maybe someone forgot the one of tasks. It results from company's loss. 

Therefore, I think that focusing on the task rather than doing what it takes simultaneously results in higher productivity.


02.I think the most important thing to be a good supervisor is a sense of humor. The mood at work is more positive. It leads to encouragement, I think encouragement is a small range about having a sense of humor. Having a sense of humor makes it a good and positive atmosphere at work. It has a positive effect on employees. It lowers employees' stress and makes them work more productively. These situations allow them to talk freely about their own idea. 


03. I agree using the latest technologies brings success to a company for a few reasons. First, using the latest technologies is more productive. Because it gets accessed easily anytime, anywhere. Also, using the latest technologies brings their employees satisfaction. The reason is that improves company's loyalty and motivated to work efficiently.  

For these resons. I belive that using the latest technologies brings success to a company.


04. The advantages of pursuing in intership in one's field of interest is that we can experience work in our field of interest in advance. It is an opportunity to think about our aptitude again. I think this alone is the most advantage because I can see in advance that only the theory is fun, and the field may be different. Also, it is a helpful experience for job search in the long run. This is because it allows us to experience practical work in advance. 


05. Either is fine, but I prefer to work in a marketing department, because my major in marketing department, so I specialized in marketing, and I have various activities of marketing. Marketing is really interesting epartment. I think the department that shows achivements the best. For example, the best thing is "famous people" such as idol, actor. 

Therir success  depends on the performance of their marketing. Good marketing results in good perfomance, but bad marketing results in a company's bankrupt. I want to bring about the success of the company and people by doing good marketing. These are the reasons I prefer to work in a marketing department.



06. No, I disagree. The best way to learn a new work skill is by reading a manual for a few reasons. 

First, work is a various situation, so we creatively cope with the problems

For example, the manual does not cope with the situation because there are various unexpected

situations. So, I disagree with this idea, this topic



07. The disadvantage of making decisions with a group of people at work is to not be participating in work. 

For example, a team project of a university that generates a new word, in Korean. 

This situation is generated everywhere, whenever. 

I have experience, so I think the disadvantage of making decisions with a group of people at work is to be not participating people. And this is unfair.



08. I think the most important attribute of a business partner is Credibility.

Because I have seen quir a few people who betrayed while in business. Without trust, relationships in general will exist. Even if its tied to a business thats directly linked to money, I think it is more likely that its headed for a bad direction.



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