part 1-4 까지는 평소처럼 무난하게 한거 같은

but 8번 문제를 약간...어버버...덤

그리고 가장 중요하다는

part 5( 뒤에 sns는 요지에 맞는거 같은데... 앞의 광고를하라고 한건 좀 걱정됨..)

i got your message saying that

you want to attract more young student customers

i have few ways to help you ( 갑자기이거에서 한 세번 버벅거림 미친놈처럼)

why don'you place an ad online or in a news paper saying that you can offer 20% discount coupon or free gift

what's more why don't you use sns

because these days young people use those kinds of media so they will check it out

they will learn more about your store

so i think you can attracy more people to your store

i am sure that it is a perfect way to solve the problem

if you have any other question feel free to call me

전체적으로 차분하면서 인토네이션 살리지 못하고 많이 떨었음....

뒤에 돼지년이 떠드는 바람에 좀 말리기도 했고 암튼 저거는 다말함...

part 6

보기가 뭔지 생각이 잘안나지만... 창의성인가?? 그런 류였음....

사업할때 중요한 요소중에...

first

it can diiferentiate company from others it may be very difficult to tell the difference betweenn samsung and lg  if there price are smiliar

so putting an extra effort into a service with creativity may be advantage over the other company

second

it can be( 여기서 개 버벅..) a good source of promotion. people who had a good experience with their creative product will tell the other people. so you can save money for the promotion .

it is more reliable than ads so it is god for the company

so.. i agree that opinion.... ( 여기서 개버벅)

전체적으로 너무 떨고..그래서 다얘기는 했는데 뒤에 돼지년의 목소리가 너무 거슬리고 시끄러워

제 억양이나 발음 인토네이션을 신경을 못쓴거 같아요.... 떨기고 좀하고...

그만 하고 싶어요 자그마치 8번째에요...