첨삭 부탁드립니다~

Q. Let's start the interview now. Please tell me a little bit about yourself.

A : Hello, Let me introduce myself. My name is Jun and I'm 25 years old. I live in Seoul with my family. There are four people in my family : my father, my mother, my younger brother and me. We are usually busy ought to work each other. So it isn't easy that we hang out together. I have worked at ABC Comapny for 4 years. After joining a company, I have been in charge of S/W engineering for three years. Then I have been woking as a secretary of vice-president for one year. When I have free time, I enjoy playing computer games in my home. Especially, I like 'LOL' game. When I am playing ocmputer games, I lose track of time.