인터넷 보면서 짜집기한 대답이라 많이부족합니다, ㅜ / 특히 시제 부분이 햇갈리네요

질문은 인터넷에서 본것으로 하였습니다

Q. 당신은 어떻게  처음 주식투자에 관심을 가지게 되었고, 누가 가르쳐 주었니?

1 years ago, I was started to be interested in stock trading. At the That time I had many worries about money problems, such as get having own home, getting married and so on. I thought I will would need much money bucks. but my remuneration was not enough to getting home, when i get got married. even if I save my pay for a long time. So i wanted to find somrthing earn extra money. That was stock trade. that was first time to trading shares.

앞 부분만 약간 고쳐드렸는데요

전체적으로 문장을 어렵게 쓰신 것 같아요. 좀 더 짧은 문장이더라도, 시험 때 쉽게 답할 수 있게

수정 해보시는건 어떨까요 :)